This is a well written and passionate poem. You capture this feeling very well with your words. This experience the two of you share is a wonderful one. This feeling can only be expressed with raw emotion and desire and to capture it in writing is wonderful. I love passion poems and my only suggestion would be to classify this one as passion. I mean, yeah it is love, but the passion speaks the loudest throughout this poem. Really an insignificant point I know, but it is all I can offer you in the form of criticism. Otherwise this is very good. Nice poem. Take care.
Well, you did something I haven't seen often, if at all. You wrote a love poem about sex. That in itself is quite a feat.
I love how you start off stating what he is not and does not do. Then you go into this description of your union, or merging, without being overly explicit. The end result is sensual and classy as opposed to being unnecessarily trashy.
I think that anyone who has had this type of experience will read this and reminisce, and maybe call up their honey so they can do it again. ;-) Just a thought. Good job. ...bb...
A "Beautiful Madness" indeed; we should all go crazy. Trying to capture the ecstacy of love's fulfillment is difficult if not impossible, for it is so personal. Intimacy is shared by two, and is incomprehensible to the rest of the masses, only the lovers fully understand. So this poem is truly on that personal level, making it difficult to critque, and who would want to change it? You wrote it the way it felt best and it should stay that way. No changes. Just one spelling, "luxury". Otherwise, we as readers could feel the warmth of your shared love, the rising passion, and the tender moments of afterglow. It is brave of you to share this with the world. We envy your love and closeness.