Overlord by Aruemos

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Submission Name: Overlord dots

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Author:	Aruemos
ASL Info:	20/M/StL
Elite Ratio:	7.24 - 102/79/40
Words:	102

Class/Type:	Poetry/
Total Views:	270
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	864

Description:
Welcome to Tornado Alley, I experience God's wrath every week, and I am in awe.

Overlord dots

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Rolling in Thunderhead
Brings about what I dread

Twisters

Cyclones

Beams of Light
Lines of Plasma in my eyes

Seldom heard Sirens Sound

Hailstones
mar the ground
they Pound

Suasion hold the Storm has on
me

Flesh find
Tutelage
under Brazen
Oak
Tree

The Sound

The Smack

and Timbers fly

Burning

Rubble

from the Sky

Land cold Hands

upon the Hearth

Quech the intuile

Save

the

Worth

Maimed
Bare
Broken

Run away

Clear the Curse
From the Earth

Submitted on 2006-04-22 01:57:38 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

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  Natural disasters fascinate me. I have never been in anything real big...though there was a microburst in my town. At the school actually. Bent the scoreboard all up, flattened part of the fence, threw a couple kids around while they were at track practice.

I don't see how people can not be in awe of nature.

Scary, but cool(for lack of better word, resorted to normal Bonnie speech)

I like the title.

Overlord. The Supreme Ruler. It can flatten a city in mere moments.

Bon
| Posted on 2006-04-28 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm amazed you'd still be in awe if you have to put up with tornados every week.

I have only seen them on films, so I'll take your description to be true. It captures the action well.

I still don't know why you called it Overlord. That doesn't quite click for me.

Anyway... the poem's good. It reminds me of the Romantics art... man's vulnerablity to the forces of nature. Good theme.
| Posted on 2006-04-23 00:00:00 | by Lulu La Feyne | [ Reply to This ]
  Alive and in Awe!

Great opening.

"Suasion" wondering what this word indicates?

I enjoyed the powerful flow of the next lines:

"Flesh find
Tutelage
under Brazen
Oak
Tree

The Sound

The Smack

and Timbers fly

Burning

Rubble

from the Sky"

This line went over my head: "Quech the intuile"

| Posted on 2006-04-22 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]

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